Thursday, September 29, 2005

A Satire

Now that it's finished, handed in and there's absolutely nothing I can do if I decide to change anything, here is the finished version. Many thanks to the people that took the time to review it while it was still in the draft stages.

DISCLAIMER: In many ways this is an exaggeration of the Auckland environment. That's what satires do. There are things that I like about Auckland as well, I just haven't put them in here.

DISCLAIMER 2: The brief was to write an imitation of a particular satire by a particular guy (Juvenal #3). Some of the oddities that people have commented on, like why most of it is a speech by someone saying good bye to the narrator are lifted directly out of the original. It ain't my fault. Really.

DISCLAIMER 3: People reading this via the RSS feed via their LJ friend's pages, I'm sorry about chewing up your screen space.

Anyway, here goes:

“Auckland”
Since the siege and the assault was ceased at Troy°,
And Rome writhed in the wrath of Vandals,
And the sun set on soldier-bred Britain,
And Hobson found harbour and a hundred lovers°,
Have men moulded matchless monuments
And choked their cities in cheerless filth,
Until top-heavy, they tip to ruin,
And residents race for worthless honours,
          And Anna,
     Drowned in petrol, rat-like, fleeing,
     Hawke’s Bay bound, I grieved that she
     Life boxed, money hoarding,
     Prepared to take her leave.

To Maungawhau°, a soiled Eden, we’d made our measure,
Her life’s scraps stuffed in a scungy Toyota.
We stood on high, crowded by vacant tourists
Bursting briefly from climate controlled buses
To womble° wearily taking bad photos, with which
Back home they can say ‘I was there,’ before
Shunting off to the next scheduled stop.
Anna turned to me then and cried “Enough!
I’ll live here no longer, heaven revolts.
Once it snowed on Mt Smart, and nevermore:
The rock of Rarotonga° was wanted for roads,
The mountain dismantled, marked out for sports
Where Tamaki once held fort. And south
Still, an orphaned King° lies broken:
No Grail Quest can cure you, now. Oh Gawain,
          Know this:
     The mountains need a hero.
     What use swords against bulldozers?
     What use chivalry, when we know
     The pull of money?

“I cannot live here; to Hicks’ town° I’ll go.
Honesty hinders me. I never learned to lie, and here
Sincerity is a sin, deception the common rule –
To get a tenant gone from your house
Spin a story of sick relatives, if they look
Gullible, screw them more. Don’t bother
With niceties of notice,° and make sure
They know how stupid they were. Tell
Yourself you’re learning them a life lesson.
Of course, that’s mere pettiness, like ignoring phone calls,
The Big Lie is more fun, for business ethics are boring.
What point in passing courses when a printed paper
Can mark you as a mover and shaker of men,
Even a hockey referee of renown.°
Public money goes to grifters – they’re
Accountable to no one but their Auntie May, makes
You wonder whose got screws on who.
When the government grants money to a weirdo
(And they’re all weird, when you think about it)
What’s the politician done, who do they sleep with?
What drug habit do they hide and more -
Whose kids are they messing around?
          I hate
     Fearing to trust. A simple soul, I,
     And smiling faces with glassy eyes
     Hide demons. Where
     Are the honest men? Not here.

“Courts care more for criminals than casualties,
The victims sit quiet, while cads and convicts
Live in luxury, and marijuana-smoking millionaires
Have the best justice money can buy,
(Poor people are pitched prison-wards, soon enough,)
I’m no-one if my knickers are less than eighty
Nine bucks. Money talks:
To build a slum is no crime, the builders borrow
And file as bankrupts when bills are due, pocketing
Backhanders, leaving backers high and dry, unlike
The leaky dwellings their gulls are left to live in.
These soggy houses rot ere they’re built:
Surprised and shocked, builders summon up the thought
That, actually, it does rain in Auckland, after all.
All this forgot in the rush to throw up wrecks
To be sold for record prices. Cram
The punters in cheek by jowl, and fill
In the gaps left to the green spaces.
Don’t worry on who can’t afford houses,
Who can’t afford to live.
Poor people are to blame for their poverty, right?
Of course, children can help what their parents do.
Politicians who postulate otherwise are
Bleeding-heart liberals, their heads in clouds.
The unemployed must eke out lives on little enough,
Else why would they work? The mills of the masters
Need grist, what use have they for human rights? °
But in the country I’ll have cheap rent and a chance to grow
Food for myself, fresh veggies, and a piece of grass. In the city
          None care
     For people fallen through cracks
     Keep them hungry, keep them ill,
     No matter if they break their backs, for
     Their crime is lack of coin.

“And more, the traffic terrifies me, that snarling beast
That holds me captive in the sticky air.
I’ve better things to do than torment myself on buses.
An hour to go 5k? I could walk that quicker!
The best bus schedule is no better than a vague
Nod to time, why, sometimes I’ve waited an hour,
For a bus that sailed by, standing room only.
If you want to go anywhere but the centre of town
Two hours of your life are taken, right there.
And the bus strikes! That’s right, ruin the working world
So you can savour an extra long lunch break.
Cars are no better – choke-monsters – if I could not cough
For just one day … Yet I’ll not.
The fumes will never free me. The air on the Khyber Pass?°
I wouldn’t make a dog breathe it, why must I?
Only drunks can cope with the chaos.
They make the chaos! Can’t they keep out of crashes?
If they want to die so bad, they could slit their wrists
And save on cleanup time. And there’s more, those damn
Suicides striking out for their share of glory
By strolling on the motorway,° right in time for rush hour.
I hate them. I hate them all.° It’s hell they’ll go to –
Not despair, no, no! - disservice to humanity.
          And so,
     You can keep your cars,
     Your trucks, your trikes and bikes,
     I’ll live where I can walk, thanks,
     Breathing sweet air.

“You ask if I’ll fear for myself in a land of
Meth houses and Mongrel Mob - not really.
In this city, the red lights merge with the white –
Druggies and prostitutes in front of churches
And the most respectable streets hold brothels.°
Home invasions, a new word for an old idea –
We used to call them burglaries, until politicians
Wanted to make some mileage. They’ll be no
Worse in Hastings, although I hear no better.
Still, it’s an old-fashioned place, criminals
Have not yet created dope farms next door to the cop house.°
          What the hell,
     ‘Crime will always be with you’
     Is my motto. Until someone pulls
     Finger and pays police to
     Be police, we’re stuck with it.

Sweet air, sweet words, sweet notes, in Auckland
You can forget about them, ‘It’s all about Art, darling,
Only the Avant-Garde counts here.’ Time was,
Poets sought the scent of beauty. ‘Uglify!’
They now cry, ‘It can’t be Art, if the ear don’t shudder,
Dissonance and discord, that’s where it’s at,
And interesting things with rulers. It must be difficult!’
Grace is passé. Don’t dance, throw an epileptic fit.
Who cares for common metre when a tab key will do, but
Though we cope with ‘Da Damyata’, or even ‘Shantih Da’, and
Dissected splinters lie scattered in waste around us,
What use are the pieces if they stay fractured?
          Does it signify
     When scraps of sound are split
     And language lies in pieces?
     Why do they call themselves poets
     If they reject beauty?

“Is there even such a thing here? Beauty? No, buildings
With facades of agèd brick tacked on to turquoise glass.°
Blow the bleeding skies° of Auckland, that blaze of
Sleazy red is no ash, it’s bloody street-lights blistering off clouds;
Volcanoes count for naught, I’m for earthquake country.°
While I lie wakeful in the watches of the night,
Still Te Mata° sleeps sound and there I once saw
A man say ‘I will not hang myself today.’°
Yet, I’m Pania’s girl,° the parts of me must split,
Longing, for two lives, there’s some of me that yet loves
These sprawling streets and the shadows and the sea,
And there are many here I’ll miss°, but
          I need
     To find a secret stream, I need the sky
     To seem small again, I need
     Hills that glow gold, and I
     Need to find the earth of me.

“There’s more, I cannot tally the troubles of this tip.
I’ll go, I’ll go, I’ll leave in peace, the list is long.
I’ll go south now, yet when south you go too,
Come see the life I’m living in the clean free air.”
And with that she left, her tatty Toyota trundling,
And I wondered if follow her I would, or whether
It’s city rat I am, born and bred
Since the siege and the assault was ceased at Troy
To brave the multitudes. And so, this ballad
          Is writ
     (With apologies to gentle Gawain)
     For Anna, gone from this place, and
     For the glory of the Queen of Heaven.
     May she grant us her good grace.
                    AMEN.

Glosses
° Since the siege and the assault was ceased at Troy: The verse form for this satire is unashamedly ripped from Sir Gawain and the Green Knight, the first line of which is “Sithen the sege and the assaut was sesed at Troye.”
° And Hobson … lovers: The Maori name for the area where Auckland was built, Tamaki Makau Rau, means Tamaki of the Hundred Lovers. William Hobson was, of course, the first governor of New Zealand and founder of Auckland.
° Maungawhau: “Hill of the Whau Tree”, also called Mt Eden, after Hobson’s patron, George Eden, the Earl of Auckland.
° womble: In the sense of “an aimlessly wandering walk” as used by John Lowe, an acquaintance of mine.
° rock of Rarotonga: Rarotonga, “Down South”, also called Mt Smart. It was quarried away to nothing so that its scoria and basalt could be used to build roads and railways. There is a sports stadium there now. It was also a pa site for Tamaki, a famous chief in the area. A friend told me once about an anecdote from an elderly lady who had been called out of primary school to watch the snow falling on Mt Smart. Her teacher said “You’ll never see that again,” and she was right.
° orphaned King: Only one of the hills of the “Three Kings” group remains, two were quarried to nothing, of the third only half remains. Local residents have been campaigning to stop further quarrying for fear that pumping more water out of the aquifer will cause major subsidence.
° Hicks’ town: Hastings, otherwise known as my home town, was formerly (thankfully briefly) known as Hicksville, after a prominent local settler Francis Hicks.
° niceties of notice: That would be Judith Webb of Tawhiri Rd, One Tree Hill. This really happened to me, about ten years ago.
° hockey referee of renown: John Davy, of the Maori Television CV fraud scandal.
° what need have they for human rights?: I realise that this is a deviation from the original’s distaste for prostitutes’ sons getting the best seats in theatres, yet my politics differ from Juvenal’s and I refuse to pretend otherwise. Immigration is not included as a target here for the same reason.
° Khyber Pass: Khyber Pass Rd. Major thoroughfare between Newmarket and the central city. It has notoriously bad air quality. Also the very large Lion brewery.
° suicides … strolling on the motorway: In 2004 there were several incidents of pedestrians being run over on the motorway just before rush hour, traffic was hopelessly snarled for hours as a result.
° I hate them, I hate them all: Ahem. Corruption may always be there, but to most people in a fairly remote and impersonal way. Bad traffic happens to everyone.
° respectable streets holding brothels: This is actually true. I used to work on the very respectable Vincent St that held office buildings, lots of trees, a large police station, two churches and a pair of ‘massage’ parlours. (Although to do it justice, the area is not unsafe. Walking home at midnight has never been an issue for me.)
° grown dope next door to the cops: Technically it was two doors down. There was a large drug bust on Vincent St (of the aforementioned police station and massage parlours) several years ago. The loads of top soil removed in skips were very memorable.
° facades of agèd brick tacked on to turquoise glass: The Queen’s Head on Queen St. The architects gutted a rather beautiful pub built in 1868 to knock up a turquoise mirrored cube. But historical buffs need fear not – they kept the outer façade intact. The combination is hideously ugly.
° bleeding skies: The island Rangitoto is named for the blood red skies seen when it erupted from the sea. (Te Rangi I Totongia A Tamatekapua: “the day the blood of Tamatekapua was shed”).
° earthquake country: Hawke’s Bay is prone to earthquakes, the most famous of which levelled Napier and half of Hastings in 1931.
° Te Mata: Te Mata O Rongokako was a Maori chief. A legend in Hawke’s Bay is that he is the sleeping giant that forms the large mountain overshadowing Havelock North.
° ‘I will not hang myself today.’: From “Ballade of a Suicide”, G. K. Chesterton. The reference to a “secret stream” is also from this poem: “And through thick woods one finds a stream astray/ So secret that the very sky seems small.”
° Pania’s girl: Pania was a sea maiden who fell in love with a human chief. For a while she lived by day in the sea and would spend the nights with her husband. He tried to make her stay always by placing cooked food on her while she slept, but something went wrong and she disappeared into the sea forever. Pania’s Reef is the breakwater near Napier where she used to sit. There is a story that at ebb-tide she can be seen stretched at the bottom of the rocky shelf, arms stretched to land.
° And there are many here I’ll miss: I moved from Auckland at the beginning of the year. It was a hard decision to make, for all the petty annoyances of living there.

10 comments:

theamazingcatherine said...

"It’s hell they’ll go to –
Not despair, no, no! - disservice to humanity."

That's new. And very, very nice.

Stephanie said...

I thought you didn't like the bit about traffic suicides? I did modify it a bit, but I'm sorry, I'm crass enough to want to keep it.

Steph

Anonymous said...

Brilliant. The alliteration is very impressive, especially at the beginning.

There was one bus route where I learned that with 100% reliability it would be too full to pick anyone up before it reached my stop. After a couple of experiences, I walked down town to catch it at the start of the route.

Good allusions - I think I got most of them (I haven't read the glosses yet.) The orphaned king was a poetic one.

Edward Sargisson said...

Hey,
I rather liked this poem - which I say with some surprise as poetry in general turns me off.
This one is cool. Good work!

Love,
Edward

theamazingcatherine said...

And, hey, you know Auckland really well so you can relate.

Anonymous said...

Wow, that's impressive.

Parts of it remind me of James K. Baxter's writing.

theamazingcatherine said...

He did call Auckland a pustulent boil...

Stephanie said...

Y'know, that would have made a good line:
"Auckland, that boil on Baxter's backside"

Stephanie said...

I love the sound of A+s in the morning. Well, actually I tell a lie. In the afternoon. :-D

Stephanie

Stephanie said...

Ahem.

"Very enjoyable. Great use of stylistic devices, such as alliteration, imagery etc. The examples and issues you talk about also relate well to the original, especially, I found, the issues of corruption and traffic. A great poem and satire." A+ :-D

Steph